Thread:Orca15/@comment-4975807-20131102034906

Hello! :) First, I want to thank you for helping out to clean up and reword sentences so they read better. However, I have some things to address pointers of some things to avoid in sentences. I noticed in some of the corrections you wrote in pauses in sentences using the "-", such as on Tinker Bell's page it was "-not Green-". Typically, there shouldn't be spaces inbetween the word after you write in the "-" on both sides. On Mary Margaret's page, there was a small part something was written in parenthesis (whosyourmomma.com) in the middle of a sentence, and usually, things aren't written in parenthesis in summaries. The third issue is at the very beginning of Mary Margaret's summary there was an addition in a sentence that read as, "When we first see her". I'm unsure how to explain it, but I'll try my best. XD Basically, a sentence opening like "When we first see her" is never written on summaries for pages because the focus is writing in a style that strays away from including or making any mention or inclusion of us, the audience, that is watching the events of a character's life take place. More of less, I would say the style the summaries on the wiki are basically like a third person narrative mode.

So, those are some of my concerns, but overall, good job. Your edits are a good contribution to improving the summaries. Hope to see you around. :)   