Board Thread:Off-Topic Fun/@comment-11464223-20131218180333

So I don't have a name for this one, but my main issue with it is it's been sitting there for ages and I don't know how to continue with it. I love it and I want to, but I'm completely blocked.

Either way though, any kind of feedback is REALLY appreciated, and, if I daresay, encouraged. ;P Thanks for reading, hope you enjoy haha ^_^

Here it is:

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"My name is Sven, Sven Frostwood. My father is Solf Frostwood, the Warlock of the Ices, my mother Tara, and I have a twin brother named Abel. I'm descended from an ancient clan of elves that lived in the Forests of F'si-Zan, high in the mountains where the region was icy. However, there's not really a name I can put to my species, as nobody's really pure anymore, everyone's a mixed race.





On my human side, I'm also descended from the 8th of the 11 Great Kings, Eusaso, and my mother's sister also claims that their great-grandfather was one-fourth dwarf, but nothing other than his renown skill in the smiths evidences such a fact. Seeing as he didn't pass it on to any of the rest of us, I think it was just a rare flair of actual talent in the family. Plus, they say he went out after just one shot of champagne-What kind of dwarf can't hold his liquor?





My skin is a dark tan, and my eyes jet black-seemingly pupiless. I have a face long and thin, and hair a dark crystalline grey, with highlights in gold. With a beard thick and growing down to my chin, and around my mouth, forming a full mutton, I'm told I'm an imposing figure. I'm tall and with a toned build hidden beneath a white beater and a black trenchcoat, with long black pants slightly flared at the bottom and leading to my sockless feet and casual slippers.





My age is 146, the elves' longevity a trait my family's thus far preserved, despite my appearing very much like an average 35-year-old human male (disregarding my eyes, hair color, and abnormally long face for a human, of course). I've lived my life in the Kingdom of Selwynnia as a farmer and trader of exotic plants and trees. Until two weeks ago, that is.





Two weeks ago, the Warlock of the Flames was murdered in his sleep, and as per keeping with their tradition, his people hailed the murderer as their next Warlock. He is a bloodthirsty monster named Th'rakk, with many qualities not unlike his many Orkish Ancestors, but with a tinge of Gnomish wit and military strategy. He has corrupted the people that once were considered the most crafty-using their fiery surroundings to create extraordinary things, into vile, ruthless, warmongers. Sweeping the lands and leaving behind only barren landscapes, he intends to undermine the High Courts and turn our Kings and Warlocks, all at peace, against each other for his personal entertainment.





I have written this in this book with full intention of burying it in such a way as to allow me to later return and retrieve it, just as Th'rakk has arrived at my small village with his army of soldiers seemingly newborn of violence itself. However, should I die and should someone else find this book, know that enclosed are my research notes on an extremely rare plant I have been seeking for many years, that if properly brewed could provide the consumer with unrivaled powers and abilities. Continue my research in secrecy, and should you ever manage those powers, use them to bring down Th'rakk."

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